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put it to the test
it's the best
there's no contest
just sit and digest
what's in your mind

to tough to contemplate?
a little to irate?
it's fate
new thoughts to create
a complex, intriguing kind

don't need to be convinced
that things are getting tense
the mind is our only defense.
locked within a fence
is where we are

being crushed by the fright
plans are not finite
but i know we must unite
and attempt to fight
what they've done has gone too far

when you call out to the sky
do you get a reply?
or is intelligent conversation denied
i'll help get your hands untied
with each other we'll do it all

take all of your wit
push it to the limit
everyone will benefit
if we all keep close-knit
together we stand tall
©2007-2009 ~GrayAreas
:icongrayareas:

Author's Comments

hey guy's

i've been inactive for a while, but just in case you were wondering i was still looking at all y'all's stuff.

this is something kind of new to me and i wrote it in about 10 minutes so i have yet to work out the kinks.

sorry to return with something so unpolished

hope you like it anyway.

if you see any mistakes or have any suggestions please leave them in a comment, or note me if you feel so compelled

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:iconbirdman1:
wow, that's sounds just like a Linken Park song. Not an existing one but it sounds like something they would write XD. When I was reading it I put music to it XDD. Nice work, can't wait to 2 c it when all the "bugs" are out, I can't find any.

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Mentally unstable
:icongrayareas:
thanks

yeah, you know, it does sort of remind me of something by them, now that you mention it

i always put music to stuff i'm writing and reading.

--
“All the good music has already been written by people with wigs and stuff.”
~ Oscar Wilde

“My music is music about music.”
~ Ludwig van Beethoven
:iconcopkid:
-agrees with Ross-
When I read, It read it as a Linkin Park song-- With a beat~

"when you call out to the sky
do you get a reply?"

What a nice line-- You could take it so many ways.

If you do edit out the kinks, could you keep that one line still intact? :3
Awesome work :'D

--
Practice doesn't make perfect...Practice makes more better~! c8

Join my Oekaki? >> [link] <<
~<3
:icongrayareas:
thanks

and yes i can keep that line the same

--
“All the good music has already been written by people with wigs and stuff.”
~ Oscar Wilde

“My music is music about music.”
~ Ludwig van Beethoven
:iconrealitykiller66:
Wow, this is absolutely amazing. Great work. :D
But, I fail to see anything that needs rewriting. It all flows together, it pulled me in. Very interesting. c:

Ok, 2nd stanza, 1st line; it's "too" no "to." eh?

<3

--
You're not old, you're young! You just don't see it yet...
You'll realize it when you're older.

XD
:iconrain-abm:
Hey there!
Welcome back?
Well, anywasz. . .

This is really good!
I don't see anything to fix!

You just rock!
<3
:glomp:

--
"Don't Stop Believing"~Journey<3
:iconscaggie:
I agree with Ross too!

Actaully this WOULD make a good hip hop song? Maybe a future career? eh eh?? lol

your writing always amazes me cuz its sooooo good. the words confuse me because ihavehalfabrain lol nah, jk

good job

--
"There are many things my father taught me here in this room. He taught me: keep your friends close, but your enemies closer." Al Pacino in Godfather Part II (1974)
:icongrayareas:
actually when i was writing this i was reading it off like a hip-hop song.

--
“All the good music has already been written by people with wigs and stuff.”
~ Oscar Wilde

“My music is music about music.”
~ Ludwig van Beethoven
:icongrayareas:
thanks

oh, yeah, i'll change it when i get on a faster computer.

--
“All the good music has already been written by people with wigs and stuff.”
~ Oscar Wilde

“My music is music about music.”
~ Ludwig van Beethoven

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